Summarize
In the article "Destroyed" by Peter F Martin, he talks about how Steroids and other enhancers are a real problem when it comes to sports. Martin includes that sports today are full of cheaters, and athletes are ruining the purity of sports. Like how back in the Olympian days, it was all about natural skill. Clothes weren't even worn. Martin also talks about how not only are steroids ruining the game for the fans, but it is also endangering the lives of the Athletes. Steroids and other enhancers have bad long-term effects on athletes. After they have retired, athletes have had heart attacks and have died. Martin wants people to realize that its not just the honesty of the game that people should be concerned about, they should also be worried about how dangerous these enhancers are.
Paraphrase
In paragraph 10 Martin talks about how although Steroids and other enhancers are ruining the honesty of sports, we don't realize what they are doing to the athletes. People are to focused on the fact of athletes soiling the purity of the games; no one is realizing what athletes are willing to do to please their fans. That athletes are really risking their health taking these enhancers. (Martin 582)
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"Nothing but grass and human flesh on any field where fair play is to be found." (Martin 581) This really emphasizes the way sports were meant to be played. Completely natural, without the help of some human manufactured drug. In my mind it makes me kind of think that because athletes now a day are not following the rules of being apart of a sport, they are punished. They are punished with damage to their bodies from the enhancers.
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Hi Monica!
ReplyDeleteYour summary was pretty extensive, so I would recommend condensing it even more. Make sure you focus only on the main idea of the source and then the key points as represented by the author in support of the main idea.
With the paraphrasing, remember, that when we paraphrase, we are still not completely using our own words, so we still need to cite the source using a correct parenthetical (in-text) citation. This looks like: (Martin 582).
The last portion was good. Your MLA is off a bit, but that's okay and we're learning, so make sure it gets cited just like the above example I provided in the future.
Double check your grammar...you had some subject-verb agreement issues.
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ReplyDeleteThanks for the advice Melinda! I found it very helpful, let me know if i should condense my summary more. My problems with summaries are that I like to include everything, hahah
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